Clone discussion

Why: The discussion regarding the use of the clones needs to be cleaned up a bit to make the events clearer to the audience. It’s also important to make Jar Jar look a little more serious than he does now because the fate of the galaxy is at stake and Jar Jar’s involvement in it is regarded as a big joke from the way it is now. It should be played around with a bit to make it a little more realistic.

How: Here’s an idea of how the dialogue could be tweaked:

BAIL ORGANA: The Commerce Guilds now have an army, that means that they are preparing for war...there can be no doubt of that.

PALPATINE: Count Dooku must have made a treaty with them.

ASK AAK: The debate is over! Now we need that clone army...

BAIL ORGANA: Unfortunately, the debate is not over. The Senate will never approve the use of the clones before the separatists attack.

MAS AMEDDA: This is a crisis! The Senate must vote the Chancellor emergency powers! He could then approve the use of the clone army.

PALPATINE: But what Senator would have the courage to propose such a radical amendment?

MAS AMEDDA: If only Senator Amidala were here.

JAR JAR: Meesa no tinkin sheesa woulda wanted an army your Excellency. Sheesa woulda wanted a…diplomatic solution.

ASK AAK: What good would diplomacy do when we are all dead?!

MAS AMEDDA: Now is the time to decide.

All group members look at JAR JAR, who is obviously overwhelmed with responsibility.

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