How: First, I would change the lines “I have trained you since you were a small boy, I have taught you everything I know. And you have become a far greater Jedi than I could ever hope to be,” to , “I have trained you since you were a small boy and have taught you everything I know, and yet you have become a far greater Jedi than I could ever hope to be.” I makes more sense like that because the part about him training him since he was a small boy is totally unnecessary unless it’s part of a larger phrase. This just needs a simple dub.
Here are lines from the script that I would like to see inserted into the film if they were filmed:
OBI-WAN starts down the ramp, then turns back.I also liked the smile that Anakin has on his face when Obi-Wan is leaving, kind of like he’s telling himself that they’re actually fixing up any rough spots they might have had. But I didn’t like how this smile turned really serious and the music became all dark. I think it would have been a lot more powerful if the last thing we see is Anakin smiling, and have the music more vibrant and spectacular as the ship is taking off.
OBI-WAN: (continuing) Don't worry. I have enough clones with me to take three systems the size of Utapau. I think I'll be able to handle the situation…even without your help.
ANAKIN: Well, there's always a first time.
OBI-WAN laughs.
ANAKIN: Obi-Wan, may the Force be with you.
OBI-WAN: Good-bye, old friend. May the Force be with you.
OBI-WAN heads down a ramp toward the waiting Republic cruiser.
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