Contacting the old folks

Why: The dialogue in the part when Obi-Wan is talking to Yoda and Mace via hologram is a bit useless because it doesn’t provide any information save for the fact that the Jedi don’t know anything about this army. The dialogue should reveal more about the mystery of the clones as well as emphasize more on the Force growing dark.

How: Replace Yoda’s line, “Clear your mind must be if you are to discover the real villains behind this plot,” which is a fairly useless line, with something like, “From this bounty hunter might we be able to discover the real villains behind this plot.”

The conversation between Mace and Yoda after Obi-Wan “hangs up” could go something like this:

YODA: Blind we are if creation of this clone army we could not see.

MACE: This disturbance in the Force is making it hard to get a sense of things.

YODA: The dark side clouds everything. Workings of the Sith these are. For a long time have they not revealed themselves. Perhaps now are they planning to strike.

MACE: I agree. The separatist threat is making us very vulnerable. If the Sith decide to attack now there’s no knowing what kind of damage they could do.

MACE takes a deep breath.

MACE: I think it is time to inform the Senate that our ability to use the Force has diminished.

YODA: Only the Dark Lord of the Sith knows of our weakness. If informed the Senate is, multiply our adversaries will.